Friday, 25 July 2014

The Spooky greasy witch

add detail to our narrative writing to make it interesting to our reader

Success Criteria

- use descriptive details (use story web)

- use different sentence beginnings and types

- use expressive vocabulary

- describe the event so the reader feels as though they are there

- create a narrative

25th July 2014
One time in a old classic cottage made with sticks and twigs a little girl called Christy she was starving to death she was so hungry that she kept asking her mum Jill if she can have a apple and she said yes but the apple was a ponsness apple was light red color inside it had a seed in it that was ponsness and it turns her into a with a long nose greasy face and long babbley legs and her witchy brum is old and rusty as.  As she was eating the apple she stop eating it when she took a bit off it.  Firstly her face was turning greasy secondly her legs went babbley lastly her nose turned long and bumpy. As she was walking thru the old greasy stormy forest she was looking for something to eat as she stop walking she sat down and she was looking around she found a potion shop she went in it she found these book at the very last page it said do twenty push ups and eat a rose and then she turns back into a girl.


  1. Great job Dale i loved the way you presented it.

  2. Thank you alex hay i going to post on you blog